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As a first time sonnet writer, I am a little anxious about posting my work, but I am very much looking forward to your help. Thanks in advance. KylieVisitors are warned of the danger here,they arrive,...
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Hi Kylie,Im a novice myself. Id still like to offer advice that you should take with a grain of salt. Youve nailed the rhyming. I also like the imagery. Ive never been to Australia but plan to visit...
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Kylie,Yes, the most obvious point of improvement would be in meter. Look at the number of syllables you have in some lines - your lines vary from 9 to 12 syllables. Try to consistently have 10 - or 11...
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kylie--a sonnet to celebrate Australia Day! Cool, sadly two of our oldest members from down under are no longer with us, but you're not alone. Other Aussies habitually sonnetize. Most of your rhymes...
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Thanks everybody for your feedback, it was both educational and encouraging. I look forward to working more with this sonett and writing more in the future.Thanks again.k
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AustraliaVisitors are warned of danger here,cautious of all our perilous creatures.So many spiders, snakes and sharks to fear,danger is one of our many features.To cross the outback will take many...
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There are still some metrical problems here:Visitors are warned of danger here,^X/OX/OX/OX/OX fine headless IPcautious of all our perilous creatures.XO/OX/OX/OOX/Ommm, trochaic 1st foot is fine, but...
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Thanks everyone for your feedback. I have so much to learn and really was sceptical about this assignment. However what I have learnt is how wrong my ideas of poetry were. I have really enjoyed...
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Hello KylieYou are doing well with this but you still need to get a hold of the metre that everybodys talking about. Its not easy but perhaps this may help.When you recite Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall,...
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Thanks for your input Practising Poet. The trouble I am having is picking the weak/strong syllables, any tips? I have been reading other sonnets posted with interest, Thanks again for your help, I...
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KylieYou are more than welcome.Any tips? You ask, well, I guess the best tip I can give you is to try your hand at scanning poetry yourself. You could either scan your own poem here or choose another,...
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